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Writing 101, Day Nine: Changing Moccasins — Point of View

A man and a woman walk through the park together, holding hands. They pass an old woman sitting on a bench. The old woman is knitting a small, red sweater. The man begins to cry. Write this scene.

Today’s twist: write the scene from three different points of view: from the perspective of the man, then the woman, and finally the old woman.


My Precious!

The old woman couldn’t help to notice when someone said ‘stop crying’ when passing her. She is determined that the woman caught him having an affair and is punishing him. Her hands freeze and switch her focus to the couple who are standing twenty meters to her left. Resting the needles on top her lap, the old woman struggles to have a better look at the couple. Her glasses is for her presbyopia and squinting her eyes doesn’t help at all. Luckily she raised her son well and blessed her with an energetic grandson.

“You have to learn to let go!”, the woman screamed. She stops and turns to him, pointing to herself. “Am I not the only one you ever need?”

“But you don’t understand!”, the man replied.

She sighs in disbelief and throws her sight to other direction. An old woman stares at them and their eyes meet for a couple of seconds. A smirk is expressed, hinting her sign of approval and continue knitting a small sweater. It’s probably for her grandson because it is red. Where is her husband? Where is her grandson? Did she come here alone? Those thoughts cross her mind. Deep inside she wishes she could grow old like that old woman—trouble free. But instead, she is standing in the park arguing with her husband —fighting to change his mind. She regrets she jumped on the gun hastily and made a promise, a promise now she wants to break.

It’s not like he is crying out loud like a 3-year-old boy who breaks his own toy. Those are tears of love! She means the whole world to him, but a guy treasures many things. Her gruel refusal is something he could not fathom, a promise she now declines. Why wouldn’t she understand he’s been dreaming for this day? Pondering upon the idea forcing her to her promise, words are carefully evaluated to precisely convey his thought. After all, she eradicated the only precious thing he ever needs.

“I have dreamed for this day to come.”, he said. “And It evaporated when you destroyed it last night.”

“How do you expect one to watch the World Cup without a friggin’ TV?! Now buy me that 60-inch LED TV!”, he shouted.

 

–A.N.

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