Tags

, , ,


Writing 101, Day Eight: Death to Adverbs

Go to a local café, park, or public place and report on what you see. Get detailed: leave no nuance behind.

Today’s twist: write an adverb-free post. If you’d rather not write a new post, revisit and edit a previous one: excise your adverbs and replace them with strong, precise verbs.

I went to a food-court with a couple of friends. It was crowded but I did my observations and here they are.


Death to Adverb

When I reached the food-court, it was already crowded. That wasn’t surprising considering it was lunch time and was inside the mall. The moment I picked a table, I noticed a family who sat in front of us, a 5-year-old boy with his parents. The father in a green polo shirt and glasses was busy pressing the buttons on his cellphone. The mother—who were forcing a spoonful to the boy—was struggling to contain her only son in order to finish his meal up. The action figure was swinging high in the air on his left with his right trying to halt whatever fed to him. Intermittent typing pause would occur as the father rolled his eyes over his thick black glasses to make sure his boy behaved.

An old man wobbled passed by our table with both hands gripping on his tray struggling not to topple it. His scalp was covered by a few hair and the light reflected gave a white hue. He bowed and submitted the tray on the table before finding himself seated. After surviving the walk, he found himself panting for a short while. His spectacles were hung between the collar and mouthed a prayer before preparing himself to eat.

My stomach growled, forcing my vision back to my cooked chicken noodle and mumbled “Let’s eat!”.

 

Advertisements